Please "proof read" my new site
Hey guys
I am starting my "new business" with some newspaper ad coming up this Thursday....
I registered my new business name with the provincial governement and my site is just done today.....
I need to make sure there's no serious error before Thursday....
So....please help me "proof read" the site
Here's the link
<a href="http://www.castormedia.ca"; target="_blank">http://www.castormedia.ca</a>;
Thanks
I am starting my "new business" with some newspaper ad coming up this Thursday....
I registered my new business name with the provincial governement and my site is just done today.....
I need to make sure there's no serious error before Thursday....
So....please help me "proof read" the site
Here's the link
<a href="http://www.castormedia.ca"; target="_blank">http://www.castormedia.ca</a>;
Thanks
Comments
Fellowship
Surpass everyone then just having something as basic as a resume. It's is impressive...
I'd stick by between then and just, or just and having, (probably the latter) to make it flow easier. Also, it should be It is impressive or It's impressive, but not both (It's is an abbreviation for It is anyway, so to use It's and still include is seems odd).
Class dismissed
[ 03-12-2003: Message edited by: RodUK ]</p>
If I would write the text: (including the comment from above)
Did you know that model agencies, music labels and potential clients prefer to view your bio, music or work online? Surpass everyone then just by having something as basic as a resume online. It’s both professional and impressive to have your very own website or demo CD/DVD to showcase your work to potential clients and employers.
Potential employers and clients such as model agencies, design studios, record labels and private businesses can view your portfolio or hear your music convenient and easy from their computer. All you are going to need are good examples of your work and we’ll design something with your vibe, your looks, and give a message and insight to your personality and what you have to offer.
We also provide design services for CD-covers and CD-ROM based business cards to express yourself to your clients and customers.
Feel free to contact us to arrange a free consultation.
Am I swiss ?
[ 03-12-2003: Message edited by: Defiant ]</p>
Maybe I'm still in the '90s but shouldn't Leonis have <alt> text within the html for the images that have copy? I still do it... <img src="graemlins/hmmm.gif" border="0" alt="[Hmmm]" />
<strong>A very pleasing site that is, Leonis. Very nice.
If I would write the text: (including the comment from above)
Surpass everyone then just by having something as basic as a resume online. It’s both professional and impressive to have your very own website or demo CD/DVD to showcase your work to potential clients and employers.
Potential employers and clients such as model agencies, design studios, record labels and private businesses can view your portfolio or hear your music convenient and easy from their computer. All you are going to need are good examples of your work and we’ll design something with your vibe, your looks, and give a message and insight to your personality and what you have to offer.
We also provide design services for CD-covers and CD-ROM based business cards to express yourself to your clients and customers.
Feel free to contact us to arrange a free consultation.
Am I swiss ?
[ 03-12-2003: Message edited by: Defiant ]</strong><hr></blockquote>
The first sentence should read....
Surpass everyone by having something as basic as an online resume.
Next paragraph should read...
...record labels, and private businesses can view your portfolio or hear your music conveniently and easily from their computer. All you need are good examples of your work, and we will design something with your vibe and looks. We will also include a message and some insight to your personality, and what you have to offer.
There, that is much better. With a professional site, you would like to stay away from ('s) as much as possible. I added a few commas where they should be, and rephrased a tad. The other problems had been dealt with. I haven't had a chance to proof-read the rest of the site, but the intro should be good to go now.
I can just copy and paste what Defiant wrote then
Oh by the way....those 's aren't from me....it was from someone who read my paragraph last week....I really didn't notice those 's until you guys told me...... <img src="embarrassed.gif" border="0">
[ 03-12-2003: Message edited by: Leonis ]</p>
Help me to see if there's still any error...oh...you may have to clean up your browser cache before you reload
thanks
By the way....I am still fixing other errors that people have told me......it's nice to have other people looking at my stuff and pointing out errors
[ 03-12-2003: Message edited by: Leonis ]</p>
"Surpass everyone with an online resume..."
Also, your second paragraph had a typo at the very end.
<strong>I'd begin the intro like this:
"Surpass everyone with an online resume..."
Also, your second paragraph had a typo at the very end.</strong><hr></blockquote>
Are you sure you are looking at the latest paragraph? I uploaded a new one like 1 minute ago.....you may have to clean up the cache and refresh...
But I will still look at the text again to see if errors still exist...
art jrk
In my opinion, Pollux is a true artist with great potential. Watch out!
Also, thanks for doing such a splendid work on my site!
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art jrk</strong><hr></blockquote>
That "home" is going to be removed in a few minutes
<strong>Don't know why....I suddenly have a feeling that the whole thing will fail miserably
check your mail.
Clean, simple, quick, easy to navigate, and pleasing to the eye. Your portfolio looks appealing, too. And by the time I got around to it, no typos leapt out at me (though I'll let you know if I find any).
Cheer up.
I always have some weird feeling when I am slowing down....
When I have something to keep me occupied I won't think of those stupid things....
Just wondering.