My Class Argumentative Essay.
"Macintosh"
Argumentative Essay
English Period 2
\tThere has been much controversy over the years about which computer platform is
better, Apple Computer or the Microsoft Windows Operating System with Intel
hardware. In my opinion the Mac is far superior than the "WinTel" computers and
Apple is superior to the rest of the PCÂ* industry. The opposing view shared by
95% of the worlds population that a Mac is not as good as a PC is just
misguided. "5 down, 95 to go."
\tApple provides a better computing experience because they have control over the
entire user experience because not only do they make the software they make the
hardware. Microsoft is a software company that makes the Windows Operating
System. Companies such as Dell, Gateway, Compaq, and Sony make the hardware on
which the Windows OS can run. You can think of Microsoft as the mother ship that
provides power for the smaller units to carry out its mission. The experience
that Microsoft provides for you is far less than great. Microsoft is a company
that makes money from its customers dependancy on their products. During this
recession nobody is innovating so companies like Dell,Gateway,Compaq, and Sony
cry like babies for their bottle which turns out to be Microsoft's arguable
innovation in Windows XP, Microsoft's next generation OS. Apple on the other
hand controls the entire user experience because they make the hardware and the
software which integrate with each other to create a seamless experience that is
far and away a more sophisticated approach to providing useful technology. How
can hardware work without software? It cant. Microsoft lives and dies with its
hardware suppliers, Apple for some reason (probably logic) thinks that software
only works with the correct hardware. Apple's Mac OS X happens to be the most
advance Operating System on the planet because of the unshakable Unix
underpinnings and of course the legendary Apple ease-of-use. All of this help
make Apple the clear cut winner in terms of user experience. Leadership matters,
philosophy matters, and passion matters. Apple's founder and current CEO, Steve
Jobs, is massively responsible for the recent success that Apple has
experienced.\tSteve Jobs' life story is a fascinating one to say the least, he is
a symbolic figure of what Silicon Valley stands for. Steve is the quintessence
of what a high tech CEO should be, cool. Steve is an egomaniac, he wants
everything to be perfect to his liking, Steve demands passion and craftsmanship
from his artists (employes) to create masterpieces of technology. Unlike Bill
Gates, Steve Jobs doesn't care about how much market share his company has as
long as he is doing better than his competition. Bill Gates was quoted saying in
1997, "Why is Steve coming back to Apple, he knows he cant win." This is where
Bill Gates is too short sighted, Jobs came back to Apple after leaving them for
11 years to start a new company called Pixar, but that is another story. Steve
Jobs has realized that he has lost the market share battle long ago but he also
realizes that he has the necessary tools to have better products than anyone.
Steve and Apple all have passion, talent, and craftsmanship. This passion rubs
off on the products which is cause for people to take notice of their
innovations and then make a purchasing decision. Apple wants to make our lives
better, just because Microsoft has unlimited financing compared to Apple, Apple
has the drive to keep innovating while Microsoft flounders in their success.
Apple does have a lot of money too with a cash hoard of over 4.4 billion dollars
in cash. Apple's CEO, Steve Jobs, is the driving force behind the success of
Apple and he helps Apple innovate themselves to the point where people will have
to sooner or later realize that Apple exists to make our lives better for the
people now and for generations yet to come.
\tOver the years, there have been more than a few misconceptions about Macs.
Let's take a look at some of the most popular ones. Everyone uses Windows. If
your an accountant, your most likely surrounded by beige Wintel boxes. But if
you work in nearly every creative field, you most likely use a Mac. Like in
graphic arts, advertising and publishing. Or in Hollywood. Or in science based
industries like biotech. Or in education, where half of the computers are
Apples. Or if you are President of the United States (our two most recent
presidents, a Democrat and a Republican, both use Macs). Even 25% of America's
lawyers use Macs. In all, over 30 million people use Macs in their homes,
offices and schools every day. Macs don't work with PCs. Simply untrue. Every
day millions of documents,Â* e-mailsÂ* and instant messages are sent between Macs
and PCs. Worddocuments, Excel spreadsheets and Power Point presentations exchanged. E-mails
delivered and instant messages shuttled back and forth. This isn't news because
it happens silently, daily, with no fanfare. That's because all Macs are
designed to work seamlessly with PCs andÂ* connectÂ* into PC networks to easily
access files and folders. The rest of the world should get along so well. The
software I need isn't available for Macs.There are over 15,000 applications
available for the Mac, in every category imaginable. Productivity programs from
Microsoft Office to FileMaker. Design programs from Photoshop to Maya. Film
making tools from Final Cut Pro to After Effects. Finance programs from Quicken
to MYOB. And games from The Sims to Tony Hawk . But if you do encounter that
rare program which isn't available for Mac, you can still run it right on your
Mac using a program called Virtual PC. Still think there's something your
missing? Go toÂ* apple.com and check for yourself. I promise not to say, I told
you so. Windows has caught up with the Mac. It cant be denied that Microsoft has
made a good business out of copying the innovative Mac OS. And, truth be told,
Windows XP is their best effort to date. But Mac OS X has sent them back to the
drawing boards. Particularly with respect to graphics, everything digitalÂ* (like
music, movies and photography), ease of use and elegance. In other words, all
the things that make a state-of-the-art operating system, well,
state-of-the-art. And I am not the only one who thinks so. Consider critics like
the Detroit Free Press, who recently proclaimed, "The new OS X for Mac runs
circles around Windows XP." OrÂ* ZDNets David Coursey, who praises Mac OS X as,
"The nicest operating system Ive ever seen." And last but not least, Macs are
far easier to use than PCs. Guilty as charged.
\tIt is easy for me to see how Apple differs in a good way than the other PC
companies but it is hard for the average consumer to know the "ins and outs" of
the way the PC industry works and what Apple's role is in that industry. Apple
is a hardware and software company which makes them unique because they are one
of a kind. Apple will continue to thrive on their ability to exploit other
companies through their ultimate control of the business process. Can and will
people switch to the Mac? The answer lies in the decision making process of each
one of you, try and make the right decision for yourself and for generations yet
to come.
the format that it is in was a requirement for some reason.
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[ 01-22-2002: Message edited by: Macintosh ]</p>
Argumentative Essay
English Period 2
\tThere has been much controversy over the years about which computer platform is
better, Apple Computer or the Microsoft Windows Operating System with Intel
hardware. In my opinion the Mac is far superior than the "WinTel" computers and
Apple is superior to the rest of the PCÂ* industry. The opposing view shared by
95% of the worlds population that a Mac is not as good as a PC is just
misguided. "5 down, 95 to go."
\tApple provides a better computing experience because they have control over the
entire user experience because not only do they make the software they make the
hardware. Microsoft is a software company that makes the Windows Operating
System. Companies such as Dell, Gateway, Compaq, and Sony make the hardware on
which the Windows OS can run. You can think of Microsoft as the mother ship that
provides power for the smaller units to carry out its mission. The experience
that Microsoft provides for you is far less than great. Microsoft is a company
that makes money from its customers dependancy on their products. During this
recession nobody is innovating so companies like Dell,Gateway,Compaq, and Sony
cry like babies for their bottle which turns out to be Microsoft's arguable
innovation in Windows XP, Microsoft's next generation OS. Apple on the other
hand controls the entire user experience because they make the hardware and the
software which integrate with each other to create a seamless experience that is
far and away a more sophisticated approach to providing useful technology. How
can hardware work without software? It cant. Microsoft lives and dies with its
hardware suppliers, Apple for some reason (probably logic) thinks that software
only works with the correct hardware. Apple's Mac OS X happens to be the most
advance Operating System on the planet because of the unshakable Unix
underpinnings and of course the legendary Apple ease-of-use. All of this help
make Apple the clear cut winner in terms of user experience. Leadership matters,
philosophy matters, and passion matters. Apple's founder and current CEO, Steve
Jobs, is massively responsible for the recent success that Apple has
experienced.\tSteve Jobs' life story is a fascinating one to say the least, he is
a symbolic figure of what Silicon Valley stands for. Steve is the quintessence
of what a high tech CEO should be, cool. Steve is an egomaniac, he wants
everything to be perfect to his liking, Steve demands passion and craftsmanship
from his artists (employes) to create masterpieces of technology. Unlike Bill
Gates, Steve Jobs doesn't care about how much market share his company has as
long as he is doing better than his competition. Bill Gates was quoted saying in
1997, "Why is Steve coming back to Apple, he knows he cant win." This is where
Bill Gates is too short sighted, Jobs came back to Apple after leaving them for
11 years to start a new company called Pixar, but that is another story. Steve
Jobs has realized that he has lost the market share battle long ago but he also
realizes that he has the necessary tools to have better products than anyone.
Steve and Apple all have passion, talent, and craftsmanship. This passion rubs
off on the products which is cause for people to take notice of their
innovations and then make a purchasing decision. Apple wants to make our lives
better, just because Microsoft has unlimited financing compared to Apple, Apple
has the drive to keep innovating while Microsoft flounders in their success.
Apple does have a lot of money too with a cash hoard of over 4.4 billion dollars
in cash. Apple's CEO, Steve Jobs, is the driving force behind the success of
Apple and he helps Apple innovate themselves to the point where people will have
to sooner or later realize that Apple exists to make our lives better for the
people now and for generations yet to come.
\tOver the years, there have been more than a few misconceptions about Macs.
Let's take a look at some of the most popular ones. Everyone uses Windows. If
your an accountant, your most likely surrounded by beige Wintel boxes. But if
you work in nearly every creative field, you most likely use a Mac. Like in
graphic arts, advertising and publishing. Or in Hollywood. Or in science based
industries like biotech. Or in education, where half of the computers are
Apples. Or if you are President of the United States (our two most recent
presidents, a Democrat and a Republican, both use Macs). Even 25% of America's
lawyers use Macs. In all, over 30 million people use Macs in their homes,
offices and schools every day. Macs don't work with PCs. Simply untrue. Every
day millions of documents,Â* e-mailsÂ* and instant messages are sent between Macs
and PCs. Worddocuments, Excel spreadsheets and Power Point presentations exchanged. E-mails
delivered and instant messages shuttled back and forth. This isn't news because
it happens silently, daily, with no fanfare. That's because all Macs are
designed to work seamlessly with PCs andÂ* connectÂ* into PC networks to easily
access files and folders. The rest of the world should get along so well. The
software I need isn't available for Macs.There are over 15,000 applications
available for the Mac, in every category imaginable. Productivity programs from
Microsoft Office to FileMaker. Design programs from Photoshop to Maya. Film
making tools from Final Cut Pro to After Effects. Finance programs from Quicken
to MYOB. And games from The Sims to Tony Hawk . But if you do encounter that
rare program which isn't available for Mac, you can still run it right on your
Mac using a program called Virtual PC. Still think there's something your
missing? Go toÂ* apple.com and check for yourself. I promise not to say, I told
you so. Windows has caught up with the Mac. It cant be denied that Microsoft has
made a good business out of copying the innovative Mac OS. And, truth be told,
Windows XP is their best effort to date. But Mac OS X has sent them back to the
drawing boards. Particularly with respect to graphics, everything digitalÂ* (like
music, movies and photography), ease of use and elegance. In other words, all
the things that make a state-of-the-art operating system, well,
state-of-the-art. And I am not the only one who thinks so. Consider critics like
the Detroit Free Press, who recently proclaimed, "The new OS X for Mac runs
circles around Windows XP." OrÂ* ZDNets David Coursey, who praises Mac OS X as,
"The nicest operating system Ive ever seen." And last but not least, Macs are
far easier to use than PCs. Guilty as charged.
\tIt is easy for me to see how Apple differs in a good way than the other PC
companies but it is hard for the average consumer to know the "ins and outs" of
the way the PC industry works and what Apple's role is in that industry. Apple
is a hardware and software company which makes them unique because they are one
of a kind. Apple will continue to thrive on their ability to exploit other
companies through their ultimate control of the business process. Can and will
people switch to the Mac? The answer lies in the decision making process of each
one of you, try and make the right decision for yourself and for generations yet
to come.
the format that it is in was a requirement for some reason.
<img src="confused.gif" border="0">
[ 01-22-2002: Message edited by: Macintosh ]</p>
Comments
<strong>hasn't your school taught you that plagiarism is illegal?</strong><hr></blockquote>
There were no requirements as to citations. I have to say this thing in front of the class, I really want it to persuade poeple. My teacher said that facts can come from any source.
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There were no requirements as to citations. I have to say this thing in front of the class, I really want it to persuade poeple. My teacher said that facts can come from any source.</strong><hr></blockquote>
I'm afraid that if this is a speech you didn't do to well laying it out. it's quite a mouthful and 80% of it will be lost/forgotten by your listeners and instead of just having index cards with topic/subtopic/detail listings to refresh your mind of what you need to talk about next you'll be reading word for word
<a href="http://www.bandc.com/mactech/mac.html"; target="_blank">Why use a mac?</a>
<strong>
I'm afraid that if this is a speech you didn't do to well laying it out. it's quite a mouthful and 80% of it will be lost/forgotten by your listeners and instead of just having index cards with topic/subtopic/detail listings to refresh your mind of what you need to talk about next you'll be reading word for word</strong><hr></blockquote>
As I said before, the latout is a requirement that goes in line with what an "Argumentative Essay" should look like.
4 paragraphs
1st-State controversey, stance, reason.
2nd-3 reasons as to why my position is correct.
3rd-State oppositional opinions and "shoot them down."
4th-conclusion and tie back to topic sentinces.
<img src="graemlins/bugeye.gif" border="0" alt="[Skeptical]" />
We write it in essay form and give the speech that way too. <img src="confused.gif" border="0">
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<img src="graemlins/bugeye.gif" border="0" alt="[Skeptical]" /> </strong><hr></blockquote>
what?
If I wrote an essay as wordy and complex as that with huge compond sentences and then went up to read it as a speech my teacher would smack me across the head and kick me out of class.
guess its different elsewhere <img src="graemlins/hmmm.gif" border="0" alt="[Hmmm]" />
It's not bad at all, but it does not even convince me.. and I'm already a Mac user!
I don't want spew remarks on how you could have improved it.. but next time, remember your audience.. Sounds like you're in High School, so think about stuff that would be convincing to HS students. They don't care about half the "facts" you told them.
May I ask what grade/class this was for? English 10?
I earned one of my degrees in Literary Theory with a minor in rhetoric, so I do know what I'm talking about.
<strong>It sounds like your teacher was attempting to teach you the basics of the rhetorical stance, but your discourse seems a bit pedantic. Almost from the start, you alienated your audience (PC users, mostly) and it seems to have went down hill from there.
It's not bad at all, but it does not even convince me.. and I'm already a Mac user!
I don't want spew remarks on how you could have improved it.. but next time, remember your audience.. Sounds like you're in High School, so think about stuff that would be convincing to HS students. They don't care about half the "facts" you told them.
May I ask what grade/class this was for? English 10?
I earned one of my degrees in Literary Theory with a minor in rhetoric, so I do know what I'm talking about.</strong><hr></blockquote>
Yep, you nailed it. Im in Advanced English 10 and I am 16 years of age.
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Yep, you nailed it. Im in Advanced English 10 and I am 16 years of age.</strong><hr></blockquote>
Any improvments would be appreciated.
<strong>Here's another source of some Apple facts, if you ever need to do a longer paper or a re-write.
<a href="http://www.bandc.com/mactech/mac.html"; target="_blank">Why use a mac?</a>
From that paper:
[quote]
The architectural firm that designed Bill Gates' $50 million residence,
Bohlin Cywinski Jackson in Seattle, is a Mac shop, and Bill bought his mom a
new iMac, because he said it was too hard for her to understand computing and
the Mac is so much easier for a novice to use. Gates says his mom doesn,t
bother him so much with computing questions now.
The high-tech electronics inside Gates' mansion are Windows-based. The first
evening at home, his drop-from-the-ceiling bigscreen TV would not shut off --
Gates had to throw a blanket over it to get to sleep.
(Barbara Walters 20/20 interview)
Bill Gates uses Macintoshes on his desk at Microsoft headquarters.
Bill Gates couldn,t get Windows 95 to boot up at its official launch
celebration. He threw a tirade then asked jokingly if anyone had a Mac.<hr></blockquote>
I have long suspected this: Bill isn´t evil. I think he truly wanted to run Apple and be a visionary instead of being a buisnessman just like Jobs propably wanted to be Bill and decide the computer experience of 90% of the population. Now I think jobs is satisfied as long as he has enough customers to be able to deliver hard- and software that occational wows people. And Bill has left the bridge (and rude buisness methodes) of SS MicroSoft to hand out billions to others who need them more than himself.
I know everyone here has picked it apart (seems like AI people love to criticize, which suggests something about their own insecurity -- but let's not go there :-) ), but really some blame must go to the teacher. A persuasive speech and an essay should NOT be written the same way! I can not believe you simply got in front of the class and read an essay... there are so many reasons why this is wrong. You know the saying: the medium is the message.
You may want to change the wording in regards to the $4.4B, cash reserves of XXX in cash...
remove one of the cash's in that sentence
No wonder kids can't write any more.
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No wonder kids can't write any more.</strong><hr></blockquote>
What's that supposed to mean?